Thursday 4 April 2013

Writing Competition

So, I'm entering a writing competition. Here's my story so far:


The Mysterious Break In
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You’re lying there on your comfortable bed, trying to sleep. You close your eyes and count to ten. One…Two..Three..Four… You’re asleep. “ BANG” You suddenly wake up startled. It’s 2:30am. You don’t know if that was a gun or a bear banger. There’s a disturbing rustling in your kitchen that you hear all the way down stairs. You slowly crawl out of bed, making sure not to make any noise. You’re trying to grab your knife you had hidden, in case someone ever broke in. You open your door. “CREaK” You tip-toe up the stairs. Its pitch black in your house, like a black panther. Your stairs moan as you walk up them. As you head into the hall, you turn on the light. You clutch the knife tighter in your hand. There’s a guy in a black mask standing in front of you, gun tucked away in his pocket. You scream and run for the phone. He grabs you, and then puts his hand around your mouth. “ SHH” he whispers. You bite his hand and run to the phone, quickly calling 911, terrified. “How may I help you” the operator asks. “There’s a killer in my house” You sob. The police arrive in 5 minutes, the man is gone. The window is open. He crawled out. You go to your parents` room, only to find a shocking discovery. They are still alive. They come out of their closet. “We put manikins’ in our bed” your parents exclaim. “We heard him come in through the door, so we hid.” You hug them tight. The

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police investigate the house.  “Force entry.” They say curiously. “But how?” You ask with worry. “The alarm was set; it surely would've gone off if it was force entry.” Your dad replies very concerned. “Well.” the police start. “WELL WHAT?” You yell. “He could have killed my parents and me.” “He has this tool to break the signal in the alarm to power it off.” “He most likely used that.” The cops stated.
 “Why us though?”  Your mother asks, shocked. “We aren't sure ma’am.” They say. “It could be because you have a lot of money so he figured you had a lot of valuables.” “I don’t understand though. How’d he find us?” Your father replies helplessly. “He followed me home a few times.” You reply scared to death. “Why didn't you tell us?” Your mother replies. “I don’t know. I didn't think he would harm us. I thought he lived on our street.” You say ashamed. “My main concern is where he got in.” You say. “Look at this!!” Your mother exclaims. You look at the door, and see a huge gap between the door and frame. There’s still a crowbar outside. “He must have taken my crowbar that I had set outside and forgot to put it away.” Your

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father says, looking very puzzled.  The cops sit you down and ask you many questions. You feel like you’re about to faint. Your parents send you back to bed. You stay home the next day only because you aren't feeling good still. “What a night.” Your dad says to your mom. “I’m just glad no one was hurt.” She smiles.  “Me too.” You say laughing. 


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